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The Lady Of Mars

Sun Sep 9, 2007 11:27 PM EDT
arts, fire, poetry, artsvine, celestina, walt-d, arts-vine, train-to-ruin
By David Mc Girr
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She dwelled among the treetops and stared for miles.
From far away her wings looked all a blaze.
She's hungry again tonight.
She shall feast upon spirits.

He sat in his rail carriage, a rough cigar betwixt his lips.
The bootleg brandy swirled in his cut crystal glass.
Green felt lined his walnut desktop.
As his train cut a swathe to the east, he smiled.

Legend stated she was born on the surface of the sun.
Others tell she was a ghost from the dead colony of Mars.
With her shock of red hair and the flare of her wings, she was flying fire.
People feared her, as they feared him.

Commoners cleared a path when he walked on the wooden sidewalks.
Patrons vacated the bar when he walked in with his tall hat and tailcoat.
He made his fortune in Europe.
They called his nation Poland; his servants called him Sir.

She became a warped flame in a dust dry world.
Her footfalls cast plumes of sand into the air.
Her legend travelled from the ice waste, to the lifeless sands of the south.
She was unearthly, they figured her from beyond the stars: Celestina.

He invested his fortune in railways; "for it was the way kings travelled".
His ideas were too grand for this nation and they detest him.
He wanted California and Chicago connected.
Bones lined his rail tracks; new workers replaced old on the spot.

She followed the new metal imprints on her landscape.
Her fine, generous wings beat slowly as she flew above a new smoke.
Some metal monster had crossed her terrain and she was going to slay it.
The keeper would feel ruin too.

Splinters of glass sprayed across the forehead of a Chinaman.
He had dispensed justice swiftly and often before.
If he felt a greasy immigrant hand slide around his watch he was quick to wound it.
His Spanish servants dragged the Chinaman away.

She saw her iron prey at the horizon, east of the mountain.
It spewed a white smoke into the sky; it slid along steel veins.
Feathers of red fell to the earth like ashes of her as she sped.
Her eyes glint as the great tail comes into sight.

He heard the thump as his chandelier tinkled like ivory.
He grabbed his gilt pistol and a servant took his glass.
He'd heard legend of a beast, and his bullets were finest silver.
They called the creature "Lady of Mars".

He climbed his ladder onto the roof of his carriage.
He shot the intruder in the back and watched his body fall.
He could see bones crack, and hear muscles tear.
Another worthless drifter had tried to kill him: what a waste of bullets.

Her arms wrapped quietly around him, resting kisses on him.
He had changed her life; she had never felt this way before.
She heard the hollow dripping of water deep in the cave, pooling vigilantly.
She held her son close, it was all for him.

Alone he sat.
Rocking back and forth, he drank wine; which he opened himself.
He didn't want his drink untidied or stolen.
Cigar smoke drifted north, his thoughts drifted south.

He was drunk when he saw him, slumped in a chair, bottle in hand.
This evil man, who had watched so many die.
Who had killed so many, and laid curses at the feet of thousands.
This man was to die tonight, his spirit taken and imbibed.

Darkness... and then faint light as his eyes parted.
There was a figure crouching, cornered in the dusty moonlight.
He rubbed his eyes and saw the red wings, the red hair and he was paralyzed.
All his anger gone and all his thoughts removed.

She surveyed, measured and investigated his form.
He was so very pale, weak and even insignificant.
He had worked, stolen, controlled, cheated, planned and clawed his way to the top.
And now he lay weak and helpless, no one to so his bidding.

The pain came on so strong he could taste it; it rolled down his tongue and splashed on his shirt.
She was barely even touching him; she just laid a palm on his chest.
All he could think of was his mother and how he never visited her.
Ever.

Her fingertips shook as the power of an evil soul saturated her.
She saw the evil he had done, and knew it was lovely he was dead.
Her little boy slept warm in the cave and a dead man sat in a chair.
She saw smoke in the distanced.

The servants loaded the train and they sold his luggage.
The homeless, the hungry and the tired boarded the train.
They would be taken east; they would be fed and clothed.
Their master was no more and the train was theirs.

A slim outline stood by the entrance, with wings all ablaze.
It's skin soft and it's arms warm, the figure was a mother.
His mother saw her son, his small wings spreading from beneath his blanket.
He said his first words.

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  • Public Discussion (22)
David Mc Girr

The reason I put this article into cryptozoology and MetaVine is that the poem deals with 2... High ranking newsvine members, and it contains a mythic creature.

I wrote it in honour of the West Coast Vinemeet which I was sadly unable to attend.

Hope you like it.

-Dave

  • 6 votes
Reply#1 - Sun Sep 9, 2007 11:43 PM EDT
Dennis P. McCannDeleted
David Mc Girr

.....I can't remember. So probably yes.

-Dave

  • 6 votes
#1.2 - Mon Sep 10, 2007 12:03 AM EDT
Sandie Seward

I'm not too sure about the colour "red", but as you say, Dennis, I think our Dave has been embraced by the Green Fairy.

Lovely piece of writing, thank you. I enjoyed reading it.

  • 1 vote
#1.3 - Tue Apr 1, 2008 8:19 PM EDT
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Celestina

I...am speechless. In a good way.

  • 7 votes
Reply#2 - Wed Sep 12, 2007 2:21 PM EDT
David Mc Girr

Well yeah. *grin*
I'm just a simple country boy who has a thing for the supernatural.
...And seeing Walt killed.

-Dave

  • 4 votes
#2.1 - Wed Sep 12, 2007 9:10 PM EDT
Celestina

Er, um...I suppose I should feel bad for being the character that killed Walt, right? But it's all symbolic, anyway, and death on a symbolic level can be a good thing, so that's all right.

Mostly, I just liked having wings.

  • 6 votes
#2.2 - Wed Sep 12, 2007 10:01 PM EDT
David Mc Girr

Walt represents the hypocritical attitudes that America has to immigration.
And he's a really good baddie.

You had red wings. You didn't kill Walt, he died without a soul,
and it was actually guilt that killed him.

Was the last stanza any good?
You know... it sums up... @!$%#... to do with you? no?

-Dave

  • 5 votes
#2.3 - Wed Sep 12, 2007 10:14 PM EDT
Walt D

I had no idea I was such a prick. At least I had servants...and booze.

You wrote this Sunday night? What a shock.

Next summer will be interesting indeed.

  • 8 votes
#2.4 - Thu Sep 13, 2007 12:27 PM EDT
David Mc Girr

You were a narrative device, not necessarily a prick.

The character wasn't based entirely on you,
the character had class.

-Dave

  • 7 votes
#2.5 - Thu Sep 13, 2007 4:40 PM EDT
Celestina

Was the last stanza any good?
You know... it sums up... @!$%#... to do with you? no?

Hmm...are you referring to that slightly bestial part of my nature which can find room both for the justification of the necessary soul-death of another human being while still fiercely loving that which I have brought into the world? About how it all balances, in a necessary, if somewhat esoteric kind of way? About how I know precisely what the first words of that young monster were?
Naturally, I have no idea what you are talking about.

  • 6 votes
#2.6 - Thu Sep 13, 2007 6:33 PM EDT
David Mc Girr

Well I don't know.
No one ever comments my stuff, and any of the comments I do get are either:

"Wow. Just wow"

or

"This is too powerful for words"

....Naturally that praise is awesome, but come on.
I crave gratification, so it was this or rock star.

-Dave

  • 6 votes
#2.7 - Thu Sep 13, 2007 8:16 PM EDT
Celestina

Bull@!$%#. I comment on your stuff fairly regularly. Now you are just giving yourself airs. I won't stand for it. Come over here and say that @!$%# to my face.

  • 4 votes
#2.8 - Thu Sep 13, 2007 10:51 PM EDT
David Mc GirrDeleted
Walt D

Oh, for Christ's sake, Dave! Celestina couldn't manipulate you more effectively if you were a puppet!

  • 7 votes
#2.10 - Fri Sep 14, 2007 1:58 PM EDT
David Mc Girr

Aye says you...
I know things about you Vlad...
VINEMEET things....

-Dave

  • 4 votes
#2.11 - Fri Sep 14, 2007 5:47 PM EDT
David Mc Girr

....If this whole thing has been a conspiracy, I think I just lost at the internet.

@!$%#.

-Dave

  • 2 votes
#2.12 - Fri Sep 14, 2007 10:06 PM EDT
hemphill

that wow just wow sounds familiar...

  • 1 vote
#2.13 - Tue Mar 4, 2008 9:36 PM EST
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Gwenny

Ditto what Celestina said.

  • 3 votes
Reply#3 - Wed Sep 12, 2007 2:37 PM EDT
Viki Babbles Gonia

Wow...just wow.

;)

Your writing is so damn visual, Dave. And sensual.

  • 3 votes
Reply#4 - Sat Sep 15, 2007 9:23 AM EDT
David Mc Girr

Dave's writing is like getting licked in the ear.

That's what you're saying basically.
(If you actually say it I can quote it)

-Dave

  • 2 votes
#4.1 - Sat Sep 15, 2007 5:18 PM EDT
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fineart411

Amazing imagery!
I got here from your comment on Celestina's profile.
It was the depth of her profile photo that intrigued me.
What can I say...
She is beautiful & you are a very talented writer.
I have spoken...
-ras

  • 1 vote
Reply#5 - Mon Mar 31, 2008 9:30 PM EDT
Eddie French

David,
I loved it.
I didn't know who the cast was based on until I read the comments here.
And THAT just made it even better.

PS,
I knew she didn't kill him. I thought you made that clear.
Bravo!

  • 1 vote
Reply#6 - Wed Apr 2, 2008 9:18 AM EDT
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